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a sea of houses comes rolling in
rusty roofs bending
breaking, crashing
shingles popping like fireworks
(expressing their independence, they die)
while you and I
(nothing more than genetic flotsam, now)
turn our eyes from a shattered-glass snowfall
and dream of the winters of our youth

this will be the end of days

...

this will be clouds folding into the earth
thunderstorms growling from foxholes
rain tumbling from rivers
as a clumsy conflagration stumbles into our skin
stealing our silhouettes
painting our ghosts on walls
(oh, had only we learned such passive resistance)
as you and I
(only numbers and figures, we know)
truly wear our hearts on our sleeves

when the world turns inside out

...

when sandcastles swirl into mountains
only to melt and flatten
until the rock has no wrinkles
when flowers shrink into their stems
like amateur stop-animation
when grass stalks and grandchildren
twist ever upward into smoke


and I no longer have any metaphors
for what the world made me love about you

this will be the end of days
Something I wrote after my Japan group went to the Hiroshima Peace Memorial Park.

8:15 happens twice in the day.


EDIT 11/01/09: DD?! Oh, wow, you guys. I'm so honored! :heart: Thank you so much! I wondered why I had so many messages when I first logged in. Wow, this just made my day. :) Again, thank you all!
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Given 2009-11-01
"This will be the end of days," expresses ~anelle in stop the clock. ( Featured by fllnthblnk )
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hazard2self Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2010
Oooh. I can't believe it took me so long to see this. Wonderful as always, and you're finally getting some of the recognition you deserve (not that you would mention or maybe even think you do.)
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sumarlegur Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
this will be clouds folding into the earth
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anelle Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2009
:aww: Thanks!
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Sesshomaru9771 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2009
Damn, that's pretty good, I like it ^^
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anelle Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2009
Thanks! :heart:
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Sesshomaru9771 Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2009
Write more like it
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mini-kirara Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
that. was. a.m.a.z.i.n.g. holy shit congratulations.
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anelle Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2009
Thank you so much! :aww:
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oneofthose-rachels Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
this is, quite simply, gorgeous. i adore your use of metaphors and how smoothly your lines flow into into another...it's perfect.

"this will be clouds folding into the earth
thunderstorms growling from foxholes
rain tumbling from rivers"
-- wow.

there's something incredibly magnetic about your descriptions. this definitely deserved that dd (:
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anelle Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2009
Thank you very much! :hug:
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rennskye Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
"as you and I
[...]
truly wear our hearts on our sleeves

when the world turns inside out"

I find this to be the strongest line (other than the last one) in this, at least for me. It really speaks out, especially because,once the world turns inside out, our sleeves will be inside us, and as such, the one moment that the 'we' in this ('you and I' I suppose, together but separate, two entities more than we) will truly be honest about their feelings is the one where they will be flipping around to hide them once more.
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anelle Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2009
Thank you very much! (Thanks for sharing your analysis, too.) :huggle:
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rennskye Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2009
Ah, don't mention it.
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bokubaka Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
I love the imagery :heart: :peace:
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anelle Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2009
Thank you! :heart:
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ScaredAmbitious Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
You did this topic justice. I normally don't say cheesy things like this, but I got shivers on my skin everywhere when I read this. This is the best thing I've read in a long, long time.

I wrote something a while back inspired by Hiroshima and Nagasaki, and if you nail the concept of death and unnecessary mass-destruction on the head (as you did with this poem), the outcome is powerful. Good job!
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anelle Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
Thank you so much! :heart: "Unnecessary mass-destruction." Definitely. It's just...absolutely terrifying.

(Oh,and I'd love to read your piece about Hiroshima and Nagasaki if you'd be willing to share. :) )
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ScaredAmbitious Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
It was more... inspired by Hiroshima and Nagasaki. I had a dream in which I saw missiles falling from the sky and I knew I was going to die, and when I woke up I thought, "But that would never happen!"

Then I remembered Hiroshima and Nagasaki and went and read up on them. It's terrifying that things like that happen in real life. People actually do just die like fish scooped up by nets. So I went and wrote a story about a normal person who gets some missiles dropped on them (it was one of my earlier works, so it was kind of boring and short).

[link] Read #5. It still blows my mind, but apparently it's true.
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anelle Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2009
Thanks for the link! (I love Cracked, by the way). :) That was really interesting...and extremely frustrating, if you know what I mean. Faith in humanity, -20 points.
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RocketFuel-Hana666 Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
amazing!
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anelle Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
Thank you! :aww:
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Zelme Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
All of your poetry is great, and this is no exception.

a sea of houses comes rolling in
rusty roofs bending
breaking, crashing
shingles popping like fireworks
(expressing their independence, they die)


This is such a strong beginning. I love the line in parentheses especially.

and I no longer have any metaphors
for what the world made me love about you


Maybe my favorite part, although it's hard to choose.

:hug: Congratulations on the DD, you completely deserve it! :heart:
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anelle Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
Thank you so much! :heart:
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Zelme Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
:iconteddyplz::hug:
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Spamuel Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009   Writer
And we all know who's to blame.
Whale! and Dolphin!
Bad joke sorry.

Anyway - a strong piece. Well expressed. Soulful stuff - keep it up :)
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anelle Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
(Whale and Dolphin? I feel like I should know what that references, but I can't think of it. I'm just a little :slow: today.)

Thank you so much! :hug:
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WritingInTheSky Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I absolutely love when an author can portray what they're thinking about without coming right out and saying it, I immediately thought of Hiroshima even before your Artist's Comment, amazing pice <3

~Wits
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anelle Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
Thank you! :heart:
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WritingInTheSky Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
no problem :D :heart:

~Wits
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the-chemical-factory Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009  Student Writer
well deserved :heart:
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anelle Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
Thank you! :)
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Bexica Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009  Student General Artist
Strong, figurative imagery. I particularly liked 'when grass stalks and grandchildren
twist ever upward into smoke'. Congrats on the DD, well deserved. x
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anelle Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
Thank you so much! :hug:
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Bexica Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2009  Student General Artist
You're very welcome.
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Jessisaurus Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
absolutely fabulous. so apocalyptical. i love it.
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anelle Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
Thank you! :aww:
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rottenpeeches Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
I've always been so interested with Hiroshima. Reading this makes my heart melt. :heart:
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anelle Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
If you ever get the chance to go to the Peace Memorial Park in Hiroshima, I'd highly recommend it. It's a powerful experience.

Thank you! :)
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CursedArchangels Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
congrats on the DD
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anelle Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
Thanks! :hug:
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CursedArchangels Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
you're welcome
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
Excellent work.

I :heart: rain tumbling from rivers

what a line, it gives me a sense of total destruction that is so unnatural and unstoppable.

This indeed wil be the end of days.

Congratulations on your DD and even more so on a fine piece of work.
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anelle Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2009
Thank you so much! :heart:
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bekkia Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2009
This is very poignant.
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:iconanelle:
anelle Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2009
Thank you very much (for both your time and the fav)! :heart:
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IIIXII Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2009
lol It seems you and Fomlessforce have met. lol
I must agree with her. You do an excellent job of illustrating great destruction with so few words.
The line about "thunderstorms growling from foxholes"
was excellent.
This is also the first time I've ever, yes EVER read a poem on this topic, and you have done a stellar job my friend. :D
You've earned the fave. :)
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Formlessforce Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2009
I randomly happened to see your comment, and must throw this in-

Formlessforce is not a "her" xP
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IIIXII Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2009
lol, Gosh I'm no good at this...lol
I apologize. :P
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Formlessforce Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2009
Ha, no worries, miss.

Jkjkjkjk I know you're male xD
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IIIXII Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2009
lol nice. X)
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